So who are you writing your song for?  Is it for a congregation to sing or is it personal worship? If you are writing for a congregation then your song needs to be ‘we’ focused or ‘God’ focused. Congregational worship songs should be for the community, praise songs, theological songs,victory songs, directional songs, faith building songs etc . I’m writing my new song for me with a view that if other people find it useful that will be great.  I really need this song.